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Dying From Love

His sweet words touched her heart
Now it is bleeding and torn apart
His gentle touch as he held her hand
Now it is empty as a barren land
His tender kiss across her lips
Ignited something deep within
Now they are parched and dry
Craving moisture that he would provide
He caressed her heart with his love
Now it is screaming from the pain
Dying slowly as she cries in the rain
Love is supposed to be beautiful, yet this same love can rip you apart inside.
Making you want to curl up and die. :iconblackheartplz:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013   Writer
I didn't comment on this earlier because I couldn't. I actually still can't to a great extent.

This is truth on a plate with no sugar-coating or fancy decorations. Raw power and emotion. I've felt it. I am sure many, many have.

You know what I went through in Jan with Chris. And then in April with Richard. And then in May with Phillip (and the disaster that nearly caused). You know I identify with this 100% and could probably write my own version.

However, sometimes, even if you struggle to believe, a window gets opened and hope is let out of Pandora's Box. If it can happen to this rotten heart, it can happen to your golden one.

DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Professional Writer
I know this is one piece you can relate to :huggle: It is hard to believe still though. At this point it is one day at a time. 
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013   Writer
One day at a time is all it takes :heart:
DarlingAngel0565 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart: :huggle:
chryssalis Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
So,so sad,my Angel!Bt beautiful!:clap:
Patrick2011 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013
:hug::glomp:beautiful words my friend:la:
anima12897 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love is something that can take and give. i know this all too well. imagery used here magnifies the effect what can be felt from love.
xMoonlightAngelx Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love can be so painful. :(
AOGRAI Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
L is 4 the way U look at me, O is 4 the only 1 I C, V is very very Xtraordinary and E is even more than any1 that I adore Coz... ;) Always keep your chin up Is Wot I say!
Love is always around the corner if you are willing to give it a chance.
Kerriaa1 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
God this is so moving.
The rhymes scattered tenderly here and there, are a pure delight ^.^
This is so vividly poignant. All the beauty and love achieved in this poetry so magnificently.
The length is perfection, sometimes less is more and in this instance it proves it.
Those words are exquisite, just the perfect ones to express an abyss of longing and agony.
Well done ^.^
DameOdessa Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome :clap:
SpiritDuchess Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
... and from those rivers,
streams on the lines.
swelling seeds, new flowers, growing one finds.
Everlasting90 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love is like life: light & dark.
darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Sad, but well written.
little-blind-mouse Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
:( Beautiful but also heart-wrenchingly sad.
DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Emotional and very heartfelt...
limeheer Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
no love without pain
Gale-OneOfMany Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for summing up pretty much exactly how I feel. Very well written :)
Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know EXACTLY how u feel! :iconheartplz:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Writer
bossie-boots Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist
:rose: :hug: :rose:
Diluculi Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ZaneTheGuardian Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: Don't curl up and die, I'm here for you when ever you need it
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